Working at a cheese restaurant is hard work, it’s even harder when the cabinets are over flowing with cheese. Frank, a middle aged man, was the owner of the restaurant. No one liked his cheese, so he had way to much.
Good start to the hook, but think of how you might add something to keep the reader interested. How can Frank get people to eat the cheese? Why are there no customers? How might this be affecting his life? Consider incorporating this slight element of mystery. This will guide the reader into asking what will happen next.
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ReplyDeleteGood start to the hook, but think of how you might add something to keep the reader interested. How can Frank get people to eat the cheese? Why are there no customers? How might this be affecting his life? Consider incorporating this slight element of mystery. This will guide the reader into asking what will happen next.
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